Strong Bad Essay

Strongbad

Strong bad is a guy that answers emails that are cool.  The Strong bad essay has pros and cons. I will tell you what I think is ok and what’s not. And remember these are my opinions. I will test his essay against the six traits of good writing that teachers developed.         

The first trait is the ideas of his essay. His essay is out of control because of his lack of focus. Most of his essay has random junk. Some of it does not make sense. Like he said and I quote, “it is my intention to play video games.” 

            The second trait is word choice. The words he chose are very well put. His words are outstanding. And it was promising to see such nice wording. As using complicated words like, "intention." 

The third is organization. His is perfect. Strong bad has a great beginning paragraph, and middle and an ending paragraph. So that is a pretty good essay for a guy that loves gaming. Most of his essay sucks. Mine does to.

            The forth is voice so that the characters have more than life in the pages of a book. The voice is great. I not so shire that it has good quality. I might have put it differently. His voice told his thoughts. 

            The fifth, sentence fluency. It was weak with his senseless act of goofing off. As I explain please sit down as you might faint from laughter or badness. He said “It is my entrance to play video games for 12 hours strait.” There are some people that are on the ground. I told you to sit down!!! No won listen!         

            The sixth trait of good writing is conventions, which include periods and capitals. Strong Bad did an awesome job with these. And fabulas. It was the best thing in the essay. I am happy with its capitals. He had his capitals in the right please  

            The thing I like is that these were my ideas. And the people who change this and make it better I will be happy.